Last week I shared my mantra, “short is always better than long”, again. I gave you these two sentence examples; then I invited you to pick the best one.
My pedigree cocker spaniel, Dusty, and I went hiking in the park this afternoon, but as soon as Dusty spotted a lavish pond of murky water, he dove right in and was covered with slimy, foul-smelling mud.
My dog, Dusty, dove in a pond and covered himself with foul-selling mud when we were hiking in the park.
Here are a few responses:
Here’s another response
Sentence B. I agree. Funny comments too. What I could add is the choice of sentences A or B depends on the circumstances. If you are in a hurry B is best but lying down on your bed for a quite midnight read, A is definitely better